Jan 20, 2012 - Poetry    12 Comments

Sad Mandarin

 

Sad Mandarin

sits tilted
with upturned lips
its wrinkled skin 
- arched as wings 
of a churning windmill 
with concealed eyes
it looks below
melancholily
and kisses
the goodbye kiss
at the hem 
of the blued curtain
Another side
the belly button 
young 
well cratered 
with the freckled 
orange rind 
ready's to be squeezed
by her hands
opening gates 
of nectar-ed rush

© 2011 Divya Sachdeva

This post has been written for for : dVerse Meeting the Bar: Imagism

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The image has linked from http://danrobinsonpaintings.blogspot.com/     

 He is an amazing painter and has been the recipient of numerous awards including The John F. and Anna Lee Stacey Scholarship, the Grumbacher Gold Medallion and an Award of Merit from The Oil Painters of America.

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I dont think I got the prompt right and if this is exactly Imagist poem.But still I wanted to try.

Comments / Critique all are welcome :)

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12 Responses

  • Is it imagist, well it paints the is-ness of the picture, and I find some of the lines sitting with me…”at the hem of the blued curtain” that d makes all the difference…. I really like this.

  • Love this – the images are to the point and there is a wonderful synergy with the photo

  • i must admit, this made me want to go to the kitchen and finish the rest of my orange

  • Very elegant and well delivered free verse, with a clean image at the center. I have no idea if it’s Imagist or not, but I enjoyed reading it, esp “the goodbye kiss/at the hem/of the blue curtain…” great visual.

  • Wonderful imagist poetry. I can almost smell the orange!

  • ready’s to be squeezed
    by her hands
    opening gates
    of nectar-ed rush…this is so juicy…loved it..

  • nice…you captured well the orange…and i like the word play in the last line…we used to eat them right from the tree when we lived in FL….i think many of us struggled with this one…i know mine are off…i think it is more like bringing a still life to life…

  • smiles…nice word play in the closing line…and you do well to capture the orange…when we used to live in FL we would eat them right off the tree…i think many of us struggled a bit with this one…i know mine are off…i am wondering if it is like a still life brought to life…

  • Well done. I very like the clear description, which is very rooted in the real but not utilitarian, and the nectared rush sounds delicious. K.

  • it looks fine to me, but that isn’t saying much, since I, too, have just tried my hand at this imagism thing. Nice poem, in any case!

    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/01/19/black-words/

  • I’d have thought there was enough imagism in this fine poem for it to pass muster!

    • Thanks David.. dont know I feel something is missing in this one.. So i have to go back and work upon this more..